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ok, as the title say i've never done this story thing before but i wanted to try cause i saw lots of other peoples and they were all great and gave me ideas so this is it:
Chapter one
Neil awoke from his deep slember to the sound of horns. But these weren't normal horns they...they sounded different almost cherful unlike the miserble war horns. Neil rolled off his hard wooden bed into the floor with a thud. ' oww' Neil cried , rubbing his eyes sleeply and bubbling to him-self ' what are those horns'. As he thought he pulled down his cotton blaket over him-self, when he opened his eyes in side he could see all the colours inside make a beautiful patten as if it were a butterfly in the medow. Neil was pulled out of his peaceful day dream at the sound of his beloved mother faintly calling his name in the background. ' Neil, Neil, wake..wake up, Neil, where...where are you?' Neil repiled ' I'm over here mother' pulling the blaket off his head' mother are you ok, you look like you've been weeping'
' yes Neil, i'm ok, but..but you need to get ready in your nice clothes....'
'but why mother'
'Neil, i..i dont know why-but just do it ok'
So Neil got dressed in his nice clothes- a plue blue suit with tiped shoes and slowly made his jouney to the main town square.
I realy hope you guys like it and please commet below - I realy want to be like my dad and write a book ( his books called taken by Bryan v.
“In my world, everyone's a pony and they all eat rainbows and poop butterflies!” – Dr Seuss
Posted at: 4:07 pm on July 3, 2012
no one!!! am i that rubbish!!!!
“In my world, everyone's a pony and they all eat rainbows and poop butterflies!” – Dr Seuss
Posted at: 1:00 pm on July 4, 2012
by the way i need some chacaters for the story, i need tributes and gamemakers and the girl from twelwe, heres the form:
NAME:
AGE:
DISTRICT:
LOOKS:
IF CAPITOL-WHAT JOB:
INTERVIEW CLOTHES:
NORMAL CLOTHES:
CHARITOT CLOTHES:
AREANA CLOTHES:
FAMILY, ROMANCE;
OTHER:
“In my world, everyone's a pony and they all eat rainbows and poop butterflies!” – Dr Seuss
Posted at: 4:31 pm on July 4, 2012
NAME: Audrey Ramone
AGE: 13/14 (However old you want her to be/ However old Niel is)
DISTRICT: 12
LOOKS: Long, carmel colored hair, sparkling, jade green eyes, pretty smile, kinda petite, but tall
(5'3), natural beauty
IF CAPITOL-WHAT JOB: Not a Capitolite
INTERVIEW CLOTHES: Long, emerald green sleeveless gown, hair curled and cascading down her back, silver heels
NORMAL CLOTHES: Green, skintight cargo pants, white t-shirt, comfortable boots, army jacket with a lot of pockets, hair in a pony-tail
CHARITOT CLOTHES: I have no idea... ummm, the female version of what you're wearing (If you're from twelve.)
REAPING CLOTHES: Old, simple white dress with a small brown woven belt (her mother's), hair curled, white flats
ARENA CLOTHES: Whatever everyone else is wearing?
FAMILY, ROMANCE: Mother died when she was five, father left them for the rumor of D13 when she was nine. She was raised by her 23 year old older sister Laurelyn (who was nineteen when their dad left. Audrey's always had a little crush on Niel, although they're close friends.
OTHER: (Are you from 12?) I can change my charater if you want! It's kinda hard to create a character without much background! POST MORE SOON!!!!
-Hannah
Hannah:
Daughter of Athena
Starcatcher
Undercover Madrigal
Whovian
Kingdom Keeper
District Four Victor
Proud Christian
TEAM PEETA!
Evamy!
BIGGEST HUNGER GAMES OBSESSEE EVER!
Posted at: 5:02 pm on July 12, 2012
PERSONALITY: Smart, friendly, has kind of a sixth sense for people's feelings, compassionate, brave, stubborn, clever, strategic, always has a plan, survivor, natural leader, funny, creative
SKILLS: Swordplay (I forgot to mention she has two little brothers ((Stick sword fights!))), agility, speed, climbing (He favorite place to think is on top of her roof), strategy, cooking
WEAPON: Sword, knife
-Hannah
Hannah:
Daughter of Athena
Starcatcher
Undercover Madrigal
Whovian
Kingdom Keeper
District Four Victor
Proud Christian
TEAM PEETA!
Evamy!
BIGGEST HUNGER GAMES OBSESSEE EVER!
Posted at: 11:06 am on July 13, 2012
You just have to keep writing. I'm sure your dad can help you when you need it. I can give advice but only if you want me to. So far the story seems original. I am sure you can be a great author like your dad. Like I said, you have to keep going. I am rooting for you!
Just keep in mind all of the punctuations. For example I'm going to take a sentence from your story and show you:
1) But these weren't normal horns they...they sounded different almost cherful unlike the miserable war horns.
2) But these weren't normal horns they...they sounded different, almost cheerful, unlike the miserable war horns.
“Sleep,” he says. “I’ll fight the bad dreams off if they come to get you."
“With what?”
“My bare hands obviously.”
~Tobias & Tris
Posted at: 9:22 am on July 14, 2012
THANKS FOR YOUR ADDIVCE, SORRY IF I SPELL OR MAKE ANY MISTAKES DURRING THE STORY OR WHEN EVER- BY THE WAY YOUR WELLCOME (@SINGINGREADING6). HANNAH CAN I REAP YOU AND YES I'M FROM 12- OH AND GUYS CALL ME JOY
-JOY (I'LL WRITE SOON!!!)
“In my world, everyone's a pony and they all eat rainbows and poop butterflies!” – Dr Seuss
Posted at: 2:39 pm on July 15, 2012
Chapter two Neil’s feet thumped along the pavement- his thoughts turmoil, spinning round and round like a fair ground ride in his mind. what’s happening? Who are these weird people? There not from twelve! As he thought his best friend Audrey Ramone strolled slowly to his direction, her pure white dress shadowing her every movement as she walked. Beautiful. Audrey’s small brown woven belt, which was tied around her waist, matched her silky long, curled caramel coloured hair perfectly- like a blooming rose. Truth was Neil really, really liked Audrey just, did she like him back? ‘Neil, what’s going on’ spoke Audrey, stoping his flow of thoughts! ‘ Audrey, I have no I dear’ Neil slowly replied.
After three dreadfully painful minutes of walking they arrived at the Town Square. On a normal day ,the divine town square would be full to the brim with stalls, markets and knife grinders, but not today- today not a single shopping bag was in sight. A huge queue laid before Neil’s eyes, he stepped forward with Audrey by his side.
‘Madame, please join the queue to the left’ said a man to his right ‘we don’t want any…trouble’ Audrey glanced at me- her jade green eyes no longer sparkling.
“In my world, everyone's a pony and they all eat rainbows and poop butterflies!” – Dr Seuss
Posted at: 3:46 pm on July 15, 2012
-Hannah
Hannah:
Daughter of Athena
Starcatcher
Undercover Madrigal
Whovian
Kingdom Keeper
District Four Victor
Proud Christian
TEAM PEETA!
Evamy!
BIGGEST HUNGER GAMES OBSESSEE EVER!
Posted at: 10:00 pm on July 15, 2012
Silence. The only sound though out the square was the sound of heartbeats pounding inside shaking body’s. Neil stood next to 15 different boys his age, a while ago- back 8 weeks ago every child had to sign a piece of paper called a tesserae, I signed up three times because I had no I idea what it was about, but we needed a little more food and these men in white said it would get us food! Clip, clop, clip, clop. A lady in neon blue came up on the stage and shaked her plutonium blonde hair in the wind. ‘ welcome, citizens of district 12, my name is unlier, I share with you a great happiness that is to many of us! The hunger games!’ unlier squealed ‘ the hunger games is a contest to remind you about the rebellion and to punish you and your family’s for your bad behaviour’ unlier showed us a clip about the hunger games! 24 tributes get chose- one lives and is rich, I hope I’m not in there, Neil thought. ‘ now shall pick the first ever tributes from district 12!’ ‘ now this is the time you cheer’ she whispered and about half the population cheered half-heartedly ‘ ladies first’ she slid her slim hand in to the ball, rustled it about and slowly pulled out a slip of cream paper’ Audrey Ramone’ NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!! it can’t be her, not Audrey ‘ now the men’ as she picked out the name my nerves ran around my body.’ Neil alocox’ WHAT!! ME! I HAVE TO FIGHT TO THE DEATH WITH MY BEST FRIEND, WHY?!!
“In my world, everyone's a pony and they all eat rainbows and poop butterflies!” – Dr Seuss
Posted at: 3:37 pm on July 18, 2012
MORE!!!
“I’m…
Crazy
AWeSome
Immature
And…
OOH! A BUTTERFLY!!!”
-Me, talking to Bessie, my iPod
Posted at: 1:53 pm on July 23, 2012
sorry guys but i need more people in my story!! you dont just have to be a tribute you can be a friend of mine who comes to say goodbye or a game maker or my designer!! what ever and please get people to check this!!!!!
“In my world, everyone's a pony and they all eat rainbows and poop butterflies!” – Dr Seuss
Posted at: 4:01 pm on July 25, 2012
NAME: Serenity
AGE: 16
DISTRICT: 2
LOOKS: Dark hair, silver eyes, pretty, strong
IF CAPITOL-WHAT JOB: Not a Capitolite, Tribute! ;)
INTERVIEW CLOTHES: Long light green dress, silver heels, curled hair
NORMAL CLOTHES: Idk, whatever
CHARITOT CLOTHES: Egyptian Queen (boy from her district is an Egyptian Pharoah)
AREANA CLOTHES: Same as all the tributes, right?
FAMILY, ROMANCE: Little brother, Jonah, mom was a Victor
OTHER: Vicious and can use a crossbow with deadly accuracy as well as a sword.
NAME: Jamilla
AGE: Late twenties
DISTRICT: 12
LOOKS: Long, bright red hair, bright, intellegent green eyes, fair skin, tall
IF CAPITOL-WHAT JOB: Stylist
NORMAL CLOTHES: Peach colored ruffy blouse and white skinny jeans, peach 5" high heels, hair down and curled, casual for a Capitolite
FAMILY, ROMANCE: Classified info, sorry.
OTHER: She's exteremely smart and will make Audrey and Neil look amazing.
NAME:Dylan Markovic
AGE: Neil's age
DISTRICT: 12
LOOKS: Dark hair, green eyes, glasses, tan skin, medium height
FYI: Not in the Games
NORMAL CLOTHES: Dark t-shirt, jeans, worn tennis shoes
FAMILY, ROMANCE: Neil's friend, has two little brothers, Grant and Kyan
OTHER: He comes to say goodbye to Neil.
-Hannah
Hannah:
Daughter of Athena
Starcatcher
Undercover Madrigal
Whovian
Kingdom Keeper
District Four Victor
Proud Christian
TEAM PEETA!
Evamy!
BIGGEST HUNGER GAMES OBSESSEE EVER!
Posted at: 7:24 pm on July 25, 2012
thank you SOOOOOOOOO MUCH!!!!!!!! I REALLY APPREPIATE THAT YOUR DOING THIS!! dont forget tell other people!!!
“In my world, everyone's a pony and they all eat rainbows and poop butterflies!” – Dr Seuss
Posted at: 2:45 pm on July 26, 2012
How, how could have this have happened im only 12, Audrey's only 12 what am i meant to do! I cant fight to the death with my best friend- oh how i wish that the earth could just cover me up and let me sink down, why me! i wander what Audrey's doing right now? Neil thought
after about 5 or so minutes Neil's mother came bursting in the heavy marble doors.
' Neil!...Neil you have to promise me to come back.. please' cried his mother
' mother i..i..i dont know what to do.. im scared'
' i know Neil, but ever since your father took off i always had you, you would always help me with what ever i needed!..i..i need you to come back'
' mother, for you i shall try'
' Ma'am, it's time to go' spoke a man in a white suit
' one more minute..please'
'Ma'ma, you have to go..NOW'
' PLEASE..just let me say goodbye'
'YOU HAVE TO GO...NOW'
And with that he dragged his mother out, silently Neil whispered to himself
' i love you mother, and i shall come back'
then on the train he was!
“In my world, everyone's a pony and they all eat rainbows and poop butterflies!” – Dr Seuss
Posted at: 6:39 am on July 28, 2012
NAME: neil alcox
AGE: 12
DISTRICT: 12
LOOKS: ligth brown shaky hair, dark brown eyes, slightly tanned skin, averege weight
IF CAPITOL-WHAT JOB: none
INTERVIEW CLOTHES: a raven black suit
NORMAL CLOTHES: a green long sleve t-shirt, dirt brown trousers and just plain white shoes
CHARITOT CLOTHES: body painted pure black, and on top,red knee length shorts and a tank top
AREANA CLOTHES: yellow shorts which match the arena and a thin top
FAMILY, ROMANCE; mother named Rasine, age 43
OTHER: best friend Audrey, whose in the games
“In my world, everyone's a pony and they all eat rainbows and poop butterflies!” – Dr Seuss
Posted at: 6:56 am on July 28, 2012
Do you still need characters? From the looks of things u have quite alot :D
“Sleep,” he says. “I’ll fight the bad dreams off if they come to get you."
“With what?”
“My bare hands obviously.”
~Tobias & Tris
Posted at: 4:12 pm on August 2, 2012
“In my world, everyone's a pony and they all eat rainbows and poop butterflies!” – Dr Seuss
Posted at: 6:24 am on August 4, 2012
“In my world, everyone's a pony and they all eat rainbows and poop butterflies!” – Dr Seuss
Posted at: 1:37 pm on August 4, 2012
AGE: 13
DISTRICT: 3 or 9
LOOKS: skinny, long dark brown hair, large round glasses
IF CAPITOL-WHAT JOB: not applicable
INTERVIEW CLOTHES: a dark blue dress covered with sparkles of glitter that looks like the stars at night her glasses
NORMAL CLOTHES: perferably dark clothes, combat boots, her glasses
CHARITOT CLOTHES: shining copper - colered tunic, black pants, wire circlet ,her glasses
AREANA CLOTHES: about the same as her normal clothes
FAMILY, little brother Christopher
ROMANCE; none
OTHER: can i be an ally with the main character?
Trust me. I am more dangerous than you think- Me
Everybody is weird, some people just don't admit it - Me
π=3.141592653579....
Beware the KIWI!!!!!
Posted at: 4:52 pm on August 4, 2012
districts!
1)
m-
f-
2)
m-
f- serenity
3)
m-
f- kendra jenner
4)
m-
f-
5)
m-
f-
6)
m-
f-
7)
m-
f-
8)
m-
f-
9)
m-
f-
10)
m-
f-
11)
m-
f-
12)
m- Neil alcox (me)
f- audrey ramone
@ everyone: to be honest i didn't think anyone would join, and please dont forget to tell peeps, i'm dying (not really)! and the max for characters is 3 and not all can be tributes!
“In my world, everyone's a pony and they all eat rainbows and poop butterflies!” – Dr Seuss
Posted at: 9:21 pm on August 8, 2012
Age:12
Looks:Long Blonde hair sorta tanish skin
Normal,Arena,Chariot chlothes:A blue Fila shirt with long jeans
Family:None a dead from hunger games
Romance:Audrey Ramone
District:10
Other:Has one of the best chances of winning
Austin
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COOKIES!!!!!-Cookie Monster
"Hey Jude, don't make it bad"-The Beatles
The Muffin Man~A story by Austin
Go to /43223
Posted at: 10:20 pm on August 8, 2012
Name: Audrey Williams
Age: 14
Looks: Shoulder lenght brown hair, Dark Brown eyes. Asian features but the eyes look uhhhh american? Not really skinny but isnt fat.
Interview Clothes: a green layered gown. The front of the dress ends at mid thigh but the skirt lenghtens as it falls to the ground in the back. ( so it looks short in the front but in the back it looks like she is wearing a ballgown.) Aquamarine flats.
Normal clothes: Capri shorts and a white v-neck shirt. Or a green halter top and pants.
Chariot clothes: what Johanna wore in the Quarter Quell
Arena Clothes: Brown pants. Red tshirt. Black belt. Brown jacket with a hood and is heat reflectant. Combat boots and hair is in a tight ponytail.
Family, Romance: only her mother, Elaine. Her childhood best friend/lover was picked but someone else volunteered instead.
Other: is very skilled with a sword and can handle heavy objects. Cant blend in like peeta but has the ability to stay quiet and sneak past people. Has some experiences with daggers. Will only kill someone when needed to. Can endure any weather. Knows basic medication.
“Sleep,” he says. “I’ll fight the bad dreams off if they come to get you."
“With what?”
“My bare hands obviously.”
~Tobias & Tris
Posted at: 4:53 pm on August 9, 2012
“I’m…
Crazy
AWeSome
Immature
And…
OOH! A BUTTERFLY!!!”
-Me, talking to Bessie, my iPod
Posted at: 6:35 pm on August 9, 2012
districts!
1)
m-
f-
2)
m-Arduous smith (anyone can take this place, if they want!)
f- serenity Farrah (gave ramdom last name, is that ok?)
3)
m-
f- kendra jenner
4)
m-
f-
5)
m-
f-
6)
m-
f-
7)
m-
f-
8)
m-
f-
9)
m-
f-
10)
m- Austin (can i please have a last name!)
f-
11)
m-
f-
12)
m- Neil alcox (me)
f- audrey ramone
“In my world, everyone's a pony and they all eat rainbows and poop butterflies!” – Dr Seuss
Posted at: 6:59 pm on August 9, 2012
“Sleep,” he says. “I’ll fight the bad dreams off if they come to get you."
“With what?”
“My bare hands obviously.”
~Tobias & Tris
Posted at: 5:24 pm on August 10, 2012
“In my world, everyone's a pony and they all eat rainbows and poop butterflies!” – Dr Seuss
Posted at: 8:31 am on August 11, 2012
“In my world, everyone's a pony and they all eat rainbows and poop butterflies!” – Dr Seuss
Posted at: 8:32 am on August 11, 2012
districts!
1)
m-
f-
2)
m-Arduous smith (anyone can take this place, if they want!)
f- serenity Farrah (gave ramdom last name, is that ok?)
3)
m-
f- kendra jenner
4)
m-
f-
5)
m-
f-
6)
m-
f-
7)
m-
f-Audrey Williams
8)
m-
f-
9)
m-
f-
10)
m- Austin (can i please have a last name!)
f-
11)
m-
f-
12)
m- Neil alcox (me)
f- audrey ramone
“In my world, everyone's a pony and they all eat rainbows and poop butterflies!” – Dr Seuss
Posted at: 7:53 pm on August 11, 2012
Austin
Vote for me as Ekaterina Vice-Leader!
COOKIES!!!!!-Cookie Monster
"Hey Jude, don't make it bad"-The Beatles
The Muffin Man~A story by Austin
Go to /43223
Posted at: 3:16 am on August 14, 2012
Austin
Vote for me as Ekaterina Vice-Leader!
COOKIES!!!!!-Cookie Monster
"Hey Jude, don't make it bad"-The Beatles
The Muffin Man~A story by Austin
Go to /43223
Posted at: 3:17 am on August 14, 2012
Austin
Vote for me as Ekaterina Vice-Leader!
COOKIES!!!!!-Cookie Monster
"Hey Jude, don't make it bad"-The Beatles
The Muffin Man~A story by Austin
Go to /43223
Posted at: 2:22 pm on August 14, 2012
NAME: Amethyst
AGE: 17
DISTRICT: 1
LOOKS: wavy chcolate brown hair, 5'7, thin, big purple eyes with think long black lashes
IF CAPITOL-WHAT JOB: none
INTERVIEW CLOTHES: a shiny gold strapless ballgown that goes down to knees dress with amethysts, hair in
NORMAL CLOTHES:
CHARITOT CLOTHES: a silver dress covered with all the different types of jewels
ARENA CLOTHES: long black capri pants that can turn to shorts, a dark green top with a leather jacket, and boots
ROMANCE; with district partner Quartz
OTHER: Token is an amethyst necklace
NAME: Quartz
AGE: 18
DISTRICT: 1
LOOKS: curly black hair, tan, eyes that are mostly robin blue but have flecks of all different colors, 6'5, buff
IF CAPITOL-WHAT JOB: none
INTERVIEW CLOTHES: a shiny silver shirt with white pants, flecks of quartz in the fabric
NORMAL CLOTHES:
CHARITOT CLOTHES: a silver shirt with all the jewels in the world and white pants, silver pants
AREANA CLOTHES: black cargo pants, green tank top, leather jacket
ROMANCE; with district partner Amethyst
OTHER: token is a quartz ring
Melody
"Don't tell me cause it hurts"
"Puny God"
"Cause after all the city never sleeps tonight"
"Hello, My name is Anigo Montoya, You killed my father prepare to die"
Posted at: 1:27 pm on August 15, 2012
“In my world, everyone's a pony and they all eat rainbows and poop butterflies!” – Dr Seuss
Posted at: 12:31 pm on August 19, 2012
-kristina
“In my world, everyone's a pony and they all eat rainbows and poop butterflies!” – Dr Seuss
Posted at: 12:24 pm on August 26, 2012
I'm sooooo sorry!
“Sleep,” he says. “I’ll fight the bad dreams off if they come to get you."
“With what?”
“My bare hands obviously.”
~Tobias & Tris
Posted at: 1:03 am on November 29, 2012